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Post by Al Truest on Dec 25, 2004 20:58:11 GMT
Lucid Dreamer
Reminiscent travels, sentient truth hommage, escaping grand delusions' symbiotic cause.
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Post by Neo Stella on Dec 27, 2004 21:13:08 GMT
Adviser Remembered
Discovery, yes still lingers. Synthetic cause elapses simultaniously yet total link keeps seperate entities synthesised.
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Iago
Reaching Out
Stepping out off the page.....
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Post by Iago on Dec 30, 2004 5:13:12 GMT
Moonlit
Tallow weeping gauzey yellow wisps sporadic candlelight tantalizing gist the evening glaze ephemeral lunar rays sublime existential luminance epistemic chime.
(maybe my best effort)
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Post by Iago on Dec 30, 2004 5:28:54 GMT
Moonlit (vampire-mix) Tallow weeping gauzey yellow wisps sporadic candlelight tantalizing gist the evening glaze ephemeral lunar rays sublime existential luminance evokes somnambulistic crime.
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Post by Adey on Jan 4, 2005 3:09:22 GMT
I don't know if it's your best effort or not, but the line Tallow weeping.. is a killer.
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Post by Iago on Jan 4, 2005 3:51:43 GMT
...... the line Tallow weeping.. is a killer. The good kind of 'killer' or it just kills the poem? I hope it's the former, 'cos it felt right in my head.
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Post by Adey on Jan 4, 2005 11:22:36 GMT
The good kind of 'killer' or it just kills the poem? I hope it's the former, 'cos it felt right in my head. Relax, it's the good kind of killer in this instance. I just think it's a fantastic line, that is visually very evocative. My mind immediately latched on to the image you were attempting to portray.
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Post by Iago on Jan 4, 2005 12:14:49 GMT
....visually very evocative... Thanks. Your alliteration is appreciated. ;D
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Post by Iago on Jan 6, 2005 2:09:21 GMT
Dream maker,
Resting graveside - empty youth - hollow wasted days - serendipitous salvation - now - wasted dreams still - lamenting - grieving - glorified death - hideous suffering - grave expectations -
show why you unleash horrid damnation!
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Iago
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Post by Iago on Jan 6, 2005 4:33:36 GMT
Mariah
Her radiant tendrils shone. Enigmatic chasteness - sultry yearning glance Evoked dichotomous sensations - Satyrical longing, godforbiddening guilt torn now with hesitation.
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Post by Al Truest on Jan 7, 2005 2:34:03 GMT
You're off course Iago. Come back when you're inspired.
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Post by Adey on Jan 7, 2005 3:17:00 GMT
Not off course, rather more a case of pushing the envelope.. Keep experimenting, some of us are reading this stuff you know
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Post by jimmy dean on Jan 7, 2005 4:40:44 GMT
simian
nuance escaping guys, sometimes, sheer rudimentary youths sexual luxuries spent toward demanding gratitude.
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Post by Al Truest on Jan 7, 2005 5:24:57 GMT
Not off course, rather more a case of pushing the envelope.. Keep experimenting, some of us are reading this stuff you know Thanks for the pep talk Adey. Iago's on the bench for a day or two. I've taken some liberties with a few other friends. (I know, I'm not well )
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Post by Al Truest on Jan 17, 2005 22:32:54 GMT
Theatric Claim
may you unfold dramatic charades subliminal languid demi-plies' steps so overt too often nefarious singular resolve establishmentarian.
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